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要取得书面表达的高分，就必须首先明白高考的评分要求。评分的依据为内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。如要达到第5档（20~25分），考生必须应用较多的语法结构和词汇并且使用较复杂的语法结构或较高级的词汇。
要写出一篇好文章，我们必须做到语意合情合理，过渡自然；语句有简有繁，随“意”而安；语法结构正确，无懈可击；语言地道流畅，书写规范。
本短文的内容包括3个方面：对照片的描述、作者结合自己实际的感想和列出为家长减负的事例。在语法结构方面，我设计了被动语态（has been offered），非限制性定语从句（in which a little girl goes up to her mom），宾语从句（how little I have done for myself）,介词复合结构（with caring eyes fixed on her mother）, 感叹句（How she wants to comfort her mom!）, 分词短语作原因状语（Being little）, 时间状语（comparing myself with…）和定语（a moving scene）, 比较级（as much as she wants），动名词短语（in creating a good environment）, 倒装句（seldom can I do anything）等等。在词汇方面，我使用了fix one’s eyes on sb, comfort sb, look tired, try one’s best to do sth, compare… with…, come to realize, spare no efforts, either… or…, regretfully, take sth for granted, Better late then never, from now on, such… as等比较丰富的词汇。
根据题目要求，我将自己书写的部分分成3段，第1段描述照片，第2段写自己的感想，最后一段写为父母减负的例子，用于和文章开头所给的一段呼应，使文章浑然一体。
考生必须注意，语言能力的获得靠的是平时的努力，对语言多作分析才能弄清其结构，对语言多练习才能做到熟能生巧，使用时才能得心应手。
下面是我就本题目写的短文，供大家参考。
The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.
Yet, a moving scene has been offered by the picture above, in which a little girl goes up to her mom with caring eyes fixed on her mother. How she wants to comfort her mom, who looks so tired after a day’s hard work! Being little, she can’t do as much as she wants to, but she tries her best to take off the bag from her mom’s shoulder. How happy the mom looks!
Comparing myself with the little girl, I have come to realize how little I have done for my parents, who have spared no efforts in creating a good environment for me either in life or in my study. Regretfully, I have taken all their care for granted and seldom can I do anything in return.
Better late than never. From now on, I’ll find time to do such housework as cleaning and cooking for my parents.
（作者，吴荣铭，无锡市特级教师）
要写出一篇好文章，我们必须做到语意合情合理，过渡自然；语句有简有繁，随“意”而安；语法结构正确，无懈可击；语言地道流畅，书写规范。
本短文的内容包括3个方面：对照片的描述、作者结合自己实际的感想和列出为家长减负的事例。在语法结构方面，我设计了被动语态（has been offered），非限制性定语从句（in which a little girl goes up to her mom），宾语从句（how little I have done for myself）,介词复合结构（with caring eyes fixed on her mother）, 感叹句（How she wants to comfort her mom!）, 分词短语作原因状语（Being little）, 时间状语（comparing myself with…）和定语（a moving scene）, 比较级（as much as she wants），动名词短语（in creating a good environment）, 倒装句（seldom can I do anything）等等。在词汇方面，我使用了fix one’s eyes on sb, comfort sb, look tired, try one’s best to do sth, compare… with…, come to realize, spare no efforts, either… or…, regretfully, take sth for granted, Better late then never, from now on, such… as等比较丰富的词汇。
根据题目要求，我将自己书写的部分分成3段，第1段描述照片，第2段写自己的感想，最后一段写为父母减负的例子，用于和文章开头所给的一段呼应，使文章浑然一体。
考生必须注意，语言能力的获得靠的是平时的努力，对语言多作分析才能弄清其结构，对语言多练习才能做到熟能生巧，使用时才能得心应手。
下面是我就本题目写的短文，供大家参考。
The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.
Yet, a moving scene has been offered by the picture above, in which a little girl goes up to her mom with caring eyes fixed on her mother. How she wants to comfort her mom, who looks so tired after a day’s hard work! Being little, she can’t do as much as she wants to, but she tries her best to take off the bag from her mom’s shoulder. How happy the mom looks!
Comparing myself with the little girl, I have come to realize how little I have done for my parents, who have spared no efforts in creating a good environment for me either in life or in my study. Regretfully, I have taken all their care for granted and seldom can I do anything in return.
Better late than never. From now on, I’ll find time to do such housework as cleaning and cooking for my parents.
（作者，吴荣铭，无锡市特级教师）