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读了黄楚西同学《我的未来不是梦》这篇作文,我的第一感受是黄楚西同学是个有志向、有志气的孩子。他用流畅的语言、细腻的笔触向我们叙述了他的志向,并为之而付出的努力,文章开关用一句广告语和一首歌的题目导入,既新颖又紧扣了文题,接着写了为什么喜欢弹钢琴,怎样刻苦练琴、怎样参加等级层次很清晰,字里行间流露出对钢琴的痴迷与执着有志着事竞成!黄楚西同学的未来一定不是梦!点评:王兰(全国著名特级教师)
Read Huang Chu West classmates, “my future is not a dream,” this essay, my first feeling is that Huang Chusi students are ambitious, ambitious children. With fluent language and delicate brush strokes, he narrated his ambition and worked hard for it. The article switch was introduced with a slogan and a song title, which was novel and closely linked with the topic, then wrote Why do you like to play the piano, how hard to practice the piano, how to participate in the level of hierarchy is very clear, between the lines showing the obsession with the piano and perseverance Shushenzhousi! The future of Huang Chu West students must not dream! Comments: Wang Lan (famous national teacher )