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【作文呈现】
请根据下面提示,用英语以“我们的英语老师——高老师”为题,写一篇文章。
高老师,我们的英语老师,中等个子,年轻潇洒,刚从大学毕业;幽默,富有耐心、想象力,常以有趣的英语故事开始上课,口语流利,板书漂亮。课堂生动有趣,常伏案到深夜,在他的影响下,我们对英语感兴趣,取得进步;课外和我们一起活动;是我们的老师,又是朋友。我们喜欢。
注意:1)短文须包括以上所有内容,可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 2)词数:100左右; 3)参考词汇:中等个子of medium height, 幽默,富有耐心、想象力with a sense of humor, patience and imagination.
【审题定调】
本篇文章为叙人记叙文。它主要以人物为中心对人物进行描写或记叙,常用两种方法:一种是对人物的直接描写,如:人物的五官相貌,衣着打扮,言行举止等;一种是对人物的间接描写,即通过描写人物的生活环境,生活细节及实例来衬托人物。旨在塑造活灵活现的人物。
【写作指导】
人物记叙文除了遵守记叙文的六要素以外,在写法上还有把握一下几方面:
▲人物的三描写:
1.外貌描写:通常只是选取这个人外表上的一个最鲜明的部分进行特写。如眼睛、个头、胖瘦、气质等。
2.行为描写:人物的行为要符合生活实际,符合人物的性格特点。可以选择具体的富有特色的行动或事迹来显示人物的性格品质。
3.心理描写:心理描写是零距离展现人物情感的重要手法之一。要想充分展现人物的思想情感,心理描写也相当重要。人物的心理描写要充分个性化,让人读了如闻其声,如见其人。
▲记叙角度:常以第三人称描写或叙述,时态按具体情况而定。
▲重点取材,主次分明:如需选实例描写则取材时要注重他人一生中典型事迹或成就重点描写,一般选一到两件,不能太多。次要情节一笔带过,不要面面俱到。
▲稍加评论,抒发感情:在描写和叙述过程中不要一味地就事论事,客观描写,应该对其行为和事迹适当发挥,进行主观想象,表明作者态度,抒发作者感情,以突出其人物个性,通过描写人物的外貌、行为、心理或展现人物对话等来表现人物的思想品质或个性特点。
▲时态的选用:时态按具体情况而定。
【激活大脑】
本篇文章:人称:第三人称;时态:一般现在时态为主;内容:老师的外貌描写;课堂特色;工作态度;课外活动;结构:全文按总——分——总结构安排:
(1) 创造良好的开端:第一段直截了当介绍本文人物“高老师”及外貌描写。
(2) 丰富多彩的叙述:第二段描写老师的课堂特色,敬业精神等。
(3) 巧妙自然的过渡:第三段描写“老师”与学生的课外生活。
(4) 情到深处的发挥及自然完美的结尾:第四段以对“老师”的高度评价概括总结全文。首尾呼应。
【词汇及句型搜索】
graduate from(从……毕业), begin...with(以……开始), attract(吸引), check(检查,批阅), show interest in(对……显示兴趣), make progress(取得进步)...
foreign university(外语学院), funny story(滑稽故事), spoken English and handwriting(英语口语和书写)...
handsome (潇洒的), young(年轻的), interesting(有趣的), lively(生动的), free(自由的,空闲的), beautiful
(美丽的)...
with...(具有), late into the night(到深夜), what's more(更重要的), after class(课后), sometimes(有时), with the help of(在……的帮助下)...
句型:be of ...(一个具有……高度), so...that...(如此……以致于。结果状语从句); make sth +形容词(是……怎么样); not only...but also...(不但……而且); what/how引导的感叹句等。
标点符号:句号,逗号,破折号,叹号等。
【范文展示】
Mr. Gao--Our English Teacher
Mr. Gao, our English teacher, is a handsome young man of medium height, who has just graduated from a foreign university.
He is a teacher with a sense of humor, patience and imagination. Often he begins his class with a funny English story, which makes the class interesting and lively. We are all attracted by his free spoken English and beautiful handwriting. He works so hard that we often see him check our homework late into the night. And we are beginning to show interest in English and have made great progress in English study with his help. What's more, after class he, together with us, plays basketball, table tennis and football on the playground. Sometimes, we chat with each other.
He is not only our teacher but also our friend. What a good teacher he is!
【亮点赏析】
1.本文作者运用直接法对老师的外貌,课堂特色及敬业的品质进行描写,同时作者用对老师与师生之间的融洽关系进行描写来间接衬托人物,从而使“高老师”的形象鲜明、生动、丰满。
2.本文使用了一些较高级的词汇、短语及承接词。复杂句型,如定语从句、状语从句、被动句及感叹句等。尤其是多处形容词的使用抒发了作者对老师的尊敬和由衷喜爱。
3.本篇文章结合内容,作者的感受及语法特点,恰当的标点符号使用(破折号,叹号等)也是一大特色。
【写作操练】
你最好的朋友(或你最喜欢的老师)是谁呢?请写一篇80词左右的短文,描写有关他/她的情况。
提示:1.他/她的外貌特征;2.要有典型的事例;3.你对他/她的评价。
(同学们:你的习作可以《我的作文》为标题,发至:xtsbaocswj@126.com,你就有可能得到展示自己才华的机会哦!赶快行动吧!)
Link链接:人物记叙文语料大搜索
【人物记叙文词汇必备】
◇在描写人的身材时常用到形容词:tall, small, of
medium, height...
◇描写体型的有:fat, thin, slim, of strong build...
◇关于年龄的有:young, aged, old, middle-aged, in
one's twenties...
◇关于性格的有:cheerful, kind, nice, kind-hearted, qui-
et, friendly, brave, lazy, naughty, wise, cruel, rude, polite, patient, strict, serious, careful, careless, clever, stupid,
foolish, silly, honest, dishonest, proud, shy, happy...
◇关于穿着的有:well, neatly, smartly, fashionably, dressed...
【人物记叙文佳句必备】
1. She is a young girl of medium height with a round face, long hair and a big nose.
2. My desk mate is a lovely boy, who is ready to help others.
3. Though he is 34, he looks very young.
4. He is always encouraging us to study hard.
5. Mr. Wang was a little man with a pair of thick glasses but he had strange ways to make his lessons lively and interesting.
6. My little cousin, Tom, is 13 years old.
7. He is very naughty and clever.
8. My grandfather died 5 years ago, but he is in my mind forever.
9. He was born in a poor family, but he finished his education by taking jobs during holiday.
10. He is ready to help others, so we all love him very much.
11. Wang Ming was so brave that he is loved and respected by the whole class.
12. He is such a learned person that we all admire(敬佩) him very much.
作者简介:王琴芳老师:陕西师范大学英语系毕业。英语高级教师。多年从事毕业班英语教学,担任班主任工作。曾获得“全国英语奥林匹克竞赛优秀指导教师”。汉中地区公开课被评为“汉中地区中学英语优质课”。荣获 “汉中地区教学能手”称号。并为《英语周报》等多种英语教辅报撰稿。
请根据下面提示,用英语以“我们的英语老师——高老师”为题,写一篇文章。
高老师,我们的英语老师,中等个子,年轻潇洒,刚从大学毕业;幽默,富有耐心、想象力,常以有趣的英语故事开始上课,口语流利,板书漂亮。课堂生动有趣,常伏案到深夜,在他的影响下,我们对英语感兴趣,取得进步;课外和我们一起活动;是我们的老师,又是朋友。我们喜欢。
注意:1)短文须包括以上所有内容,可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 2)词数:100左右; 3)参考词汇:中等个子of medium height, 幽默,富有耐心、想象力with a sense of humor, patience and imagination.
【审题定调】
本篇文章为叙人记叙文。它主要以人物为中心对人物进行描写或记叙,常用两种方法:一种是对人物的直接描写,如:人物的五官相貌,衣着打扮,言行举止等;一种是对人物的间接描写,即通过描写人物的生活环境,生活细节及实例来衬托人物。旨在塑造活灵活现的人物。
【写作指导】
人物记叙文除了遵守记叙文的六要素以外,在写法上还有把握一下几方面:
▲人物的三描写:
1.外貌描写:通常只是选取这个人外表上的一个最鲜明的部分进行特写。如眼睛、个头、胖瘦、气质等。
2.行为描写:人物的行为要符合生活实际,符合人物的性格特点。可以选择具体的富有特色的行动或事迹来显示人物的性格品质。
3.心理描写:心理描写是零距离展现人物情感的重要手法之一。要想充分展现人物的思想情感,心理描写也相当重要。人物的心理描写要充分个性化,让人读了如闻其声,如见其人。
▲记叙角度:常以第三人称描写或叙述,时态按具体情况而定。
▲重点取材,主次分明:如需选实例描写则取材时要注重他人一生中典型事迹或成就重点描写,一般选一到两件,不能太多。次要情节一笔带过,不要面面俱到。
▲稍加评论,抒发感情:在描写和叙述过程中不要一味地就事论事,客观描写,应该对其行为和事迹适当发挥,进行主观想象,表明作者态度,抒发作者感情,以突出其人物个性,通过描写人物的外貌、行为、心理或展现人物对话等来表现人物的思想品质或个性特点。
▲时态的选用:时态按具体情况而定。
【激活大脑】
本篇文章:人称:第三人称;时态:一般现在时态为主;内容:老师的外貌描写;课堂特色;工作态度;课外活动;结构:全文按总——分——总结构安排:
(1) 创造良好的开端:第一段直截了当介绍本文人物“高老师”及外貌描写。
(2) 丰富多彩的叙述:第二段描写老师的课堂特色,敬业精神等。
(3) 巧妙自然的过渡:第三段描写“老师”与学生的课外生活。
(4) 情到深处的发挥及自然完美的结尾:第四段以对“老师”的高度评价概括总结全文。首尾呼应。
【词汇及句型搜索】
graduate from(从……毕业), begin...with(以……开始), attract(吸引), check(检查,批阅), show interest in(对……显示兴趣), make progress(取得进步)...
foreign university(外语学院), funny story(滑稽故事), spoken English and handwriting(英语口语和书写)...
handsome (潇洒的), young(年轻的), interesting(有趣的), lively(生动的), free(自由的,空闲的), beautiful
(美丽的)...
with...(具有), late into the night(到深夜), what's more(更重要的), after class(课后), sometimes(有时), with the help of(在……的帮助下)...
句型:be of ...(一个具有……高度), so...that...(如此……以致于。结果状语从句); make sth +形容词(是……怎么样); not only...but also...(不但……而且); what/how引导的感叹句等。
标点符号:句号,逗号,破折号,叹号等。
【范文展示】
Mr. Gao--Our English Teacher
Mr. Gao, our English teacher, is a handsome young man of medium height, who has just graduated from a foreign university.
He is a teacher with a sense of humor, patience and imagination. Often he begins his class with a funny English story, which makes the class interesting and lively. We are all attracted by his free spoken English and beautiful handwriting. He works so hard that we often see him check our homework late into the night. And we are beginning to show interest in English and have made great progress in English study with his help. What's more, after class he, together with us, plays basketball, table tennis and football on the playground. Sometimes, we chat with each other.
He is not only our teacher but also our friend. What a good teacher he is!
【亮点赏析】
1.本文作者运用直接法对老师的外貌,课堂特色及敬业的品质进行描写,同时作者用对老师与师生之间的融洽关系进行描写来间接衬托人物,从而使“高老师”的形象鲜明、生动、丰满。
2.本文使用了一些较高级的词汇、短语及承接词。复杂句型,如定语从句、状语从句、被动句及感叹句等。尤其是多处形容词的使用抒发了作者对老师的尊敬和由衷喜爱。
3.本篇文章结合内容,作者的感受及语法特点,恰当的标点符号使用(破折号,叹号等)也是一大特色。
【写作操练】
你最好的朋友(或你最喜欢的老师)是谁呢?请写一篇80词左右的短文,描写有关他/她的情况。
提示:1.他/她的外貌特征;2.要有典型的事例;3.你对他/她的评价。
(同学们:你的习作可以《我的作文》为标题,发至:xtsbaocswj@126.com,你就有可能得到展示自己才华的机会哦!赶快行动吧!)
Link链接:人物记叙文语料大搜索
【人物记叙文词汇必备】
◇在描写人的身材时常用到形容词:tall, small, of
medium, height...
◇描写体型的有:fat, thin, slim, of strong build...
◇关于年龄的有:young, aged, old, middle-aged, in
one's twenties...
◇关于性格的有:cheerful, kind, nice, kind-hearted, qui-
et, friendly, brave, lazy, naughty, wise, cruel, rude, polite, patient, strict, serious, careful, careless, clever, stupid,
foolish, silly, honest, dishonest, proud, shy, happy...
◇关于穿着的有:well, neatly, smartly, fashionably, dressed...
【人物记叙文佳句必备】
1. She is a young girl of medium height with a round face, long hair and a big nose.
2. My desk mate is a lovely boy, who is ready to help others.
3. Though he is 34, he looks very young.
4. He is always encouraging us to study hard.
5. Mr. Wang was a little man with a pair of thick glasses but he had strange ways to make his lessons lively and interesting.
6. My little cousin, Tom, is 13 years old.
7. He is very naughty and clever.
8. My grandfather died 5 years ago, but he is in my mind forever.
9. He was born in a poor family, but he finished his education by taking jobs during holiday.
10. He is ready to help others, so we all love him very much.
11. Wang Ming was so brave that he is loved and respected by the whole class.
12. He is such a learned person that we all admire(敬佩) him very much.
作者简介:王琴芳老师:陕西师范大学英语系毕业。英语高级教师。多年从事毕业班英语教学,担任班主任工作。曾获得“全国英语奥林匹克竞赛优秀指导教师”。汉中地区公开课被评为“汉中地区中学英语优质课”。荣获 “汉中地区教学能手”称号。并为《英语周报》等多种英语教辅报撰稿。