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纵观本期的高年级作文,每一篇都具有了相当的水准,不但记事状物写人都能做到层次分明,形象生动,而且还从中蕴含了一定的思想意蕴和情感色彩,增加了作文的深度和可读性徐依人的《水》用充满情感的笔触描写了家乡一条小河水质的变化,谴责了人们环保意识的单薄：“叔叔阿姨们,当你在享受美味佳肴时,当你在花前月下欣赏美景时,你可知道,我们的母亲河在无声地流泪,也许不用多久,她的泪便会干涸,你们的后代或许再也没有了那一份纯真的欢乐。为了我们的母亲河,为了我们的后辈,请留住那一份绿水吧!”以环保为题材的作文虽然很多,但大多都是就环保而写环保,相比之下,徐依人的《水》无论是在主题的挖掘上还是在思想内容的揭示上都要深邃得多了。描写动物的作文也很多,但像谭洪江的《回来吧,小鸟》那样写得如此牵肠挂肚的却不多见。“我无法换回对鸟儿的伤害,用心做了一个鸟窝高高地挂在树上,等待鸟儿回家。回来吧,亲爱的小鸟!我多想听见你的歌声!我多想再见你的身影!”小作者的忏悔之情溢于言表,让人读了无不动容。人和动物是好朋友,但无意间的伤害还是经常发生的,如何避免这种伤害呢？特别是对调皮的小男孩来说尤其重要,本文就提出了这样一个严肃而让人深思的问题,同时,也就深化了作文的主题,使文章有了较深厚的思想内涵。可见,作文要上一个更高的层次,小作者情感的抒发和文章所含的思想厚度是十分重要的。
Throughout this period of high school grade composition, each one has a considerable standard, not only memorize things can be structured writers, vivid images, but also contains a certain amount of thought implication and emotional color, an increase of The depth and readability of the essay Xu Yongren's “Water” depicts the changes in the water quality of a small river in his hometown with emotionally charged brush strokes, condemning people's weak sense of environmental protection: “Uncles and aunts, when you enjoy delicious food, When you enjoy the beauty in front of the moonlight, you know, our mother river tears silently, maybe not too long, her tears will dry up, and your descendants may no longer have that pure innocence. For our mother River, for our younger generation, please keep a green water it! ”Although the composition of the theme of environmental protection are many, but mostly write environmental protection and environmental protection, by contrast, Xu's human“ water ”in either The digging of the subject or the revealing of the contents of the mind are much deeper. There are also many essays depicting animals, but it is rare to see such stories as “come back, birds,” written by Tan Hongjiang. “I can not get back the damage done to the birds, in my heart I made a nest hanging high in the tree, waiting for the birds to go home.” Come back, dear bird! I would like to hear your singing! Goodbye your figure! "The author's penitent repetitious overflowing, people read everything moving. People and animals are good friends, but unintentional injuries are still frequent, how to avoid such harm? Especially for naughty little boy is particularly important, this article proposed such a serious and thought-provoking questions, at the same time, it also deepens the theme of the composition, so that the article has a deeper ideological content. Can be seen that the essay to a higher level, the author's emotional expression and the thickness of the thought contained in the article is very important.