瞧,那个人

• 作 者: 田轶琛
• 机 构: 上海市市三女中,
• 出 处: 中文自修
• 发表日期: 2013年01期
• 关键词: 语言描写 令人 人民广场

一篇写人的习作。怎么写?把人物放在一个特定的环境中。一对老女人乘地铁,先用的语言描写,“快进来,孩子第一次乘地铁不懂”;一位白发苍苍的老奶奶牵着的居然是一个五六十岁的痴呆女人,一连串的动词,从“牵”开始,之后是“护住”“轻拍”“摸了摸”“慢慢地伸手,缓缓擦去了”“搂着”等,将老奶奶的挚爱刻画得淋漓尽致。最后点题:“瞧,那个人,她是这个世上千千万万个母亲之一。”发自天性的爱,令人感动。

A written workbook. How to write? Put people in a specific environment. An old woman by subway, first described in words, “Come in, the first time the child did not understand the subway ”; a white-haired grandmother was actually holding a 50-year-old dementia woman, A series of verbs, starting with “pull ”, followed by “hug ” “pat ” “touched ” “slowly reach out and slowly wipe ” “ With ”, etc., the grandmother’s love portrayed most vividly. Finally, the question: “Look, that person, she is one of the tens of millions of mothers in this world.” "The love of nature, touching.