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窗外不知何时起飘起来点滴(将“点滴”换成“片片”如何?)的雪花,漫天纷飞的雪如冬日的信使送来寒冬的讯号。形态各异的冬之舞者用不同的舞姿带来各自的精彩,惟有那苍茫的白色一尘(应为“成”)不变……(从窗外这一富有情景感的说法开始,很好!后面的文字很自然,给人一种平静感,一个“冬日”轻轻扣题)随意整理着书桌,一张老照片让我的目光动弹不得,十指如同十根长长的锁链死死抓住不肯放下。也许
Do not know when the window from time to time float drip (“” bit by bit “into ” piece “how?) Snow, snow blowing like winter messenger sent winter signal. Different forms of winter dancers bring their own wonderful dance with different, only the vast white dust (should be ”into“) unchanged ... (From the window of this rich sense of the scene began, Very good! The back of the text is very natural, giving a sense of calm, a ”winter " button deduction) free to organize the desk, an old photo so my eyes can not move, ten fingers as ten long Chained chain will not let go. Maybe