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Dear Emily，
How’s it going ？ Today I want to tell you something about my school rules. There are so many rules in my school.
First， we can’t arrive late for school. Second， don’t eat， listen to music or talk loudly in the classroom. Third， don’t take phones to school. Fourth， we have to wear uniforms on school days. Last， we must go home in time .
I don’t like rules， but I have to follow them. What about you？ Can you tell me about your school rules？
Yours，
Li Hua
龚 晨老师点评：
作者在写这篇文章时刚刚结束“祈使句”的学习，活学活用，表现不错。文章通过序数词的形式向我们介绍了本校校规，条理清楚，脉络清晰。恰当运用情态动词“can’t， have to， must ”等，表现出校规的严肃与严格。同时灵活运用“How’s it going？”句型引出下文，是一个很出彩的开头。文中还出现“there be” 句型，“arrive late for， on time”等短语，不矫揉造作，使文章独具一格。结尾也表达了自己的看法，以询问朋友的方式结束全文，自然流畅。
美中不足的是，文中也还有一些小小的瑕疵。如 “on school day”应改为“on school days”； 直接使用Don’t祈使句显得过于生硬；另外，因词汇和语法知识有限，有些句子略显单调， 缺乏对“校规”的进一步解释说明。
Dear Emily，
How’s it going？ Today I want to tell you something about our school rules. There are so many here.
Firstly， we can’t be late for school； this is important. Besides， we’re not allowed to eat anything， chat or listen to music during classes. What’s more， we can’t take our phones to school， for it’s bad for our study. Finally， we have to wear school uniforms， and we must go home in time after school.
I don’t like rules， but I have to follow them. Do you also have so many rules in your school？ Please write to tell me.
Yours，
Li Hua
How’s it going ？ Today I want to tell you something about my school rules. There are so many rules in my school.
First， we can’t arrive late for school. Second， don’t eat， listen to music or talk loudly in the classroom. Third， don’t take phones to school. Fourth， we have to wear uniforms on school days. Last， we must go home in time .
I don’t like rules， but I have to follow them. What about you？ Can you tell me about your school rules？
Yours，
Li Hua
龚 晨老师点评：
作者在写这篇文章时刚刚结束“祈使句”的学习，活学活用，表现不错。文章通过序数词的形式向我们介绍了本校校规，条理清楚，脉络清晰。恰当运用情态动词“can’t， have to， must ”等，表现出校规的严肃与严格。同时灵活运用“How’s it going？”句型引出下文，是一个很出彩的开头。文中还出现“there be” 句型，“arrive late for， on time”等短语，不矫揉造作，使文章独具一格。结尾也表达了自己的看法，以询问朋友的方式结束全文，自然流畅。
美中不足的是，文中也还有一些小小的瑕疵。如 “on school day”应改为“on school days”； 直接使用Don’t祈使句显得过于生硬；另外，因词汇和语法知识有限，有些句子略显单调， 缺乏对“校规”的进一步解释说明。
Dear Emily，
How’s it going？ Today I want to tell you something about our school rules. There are so many here.
Firstly， we can’t be late for school； this is important. Besides， we’re not allowed to eat anything， chat or listen to music during classes. What’s more， we can’t take our phones to school， for it’s bad for our study. Finally， we have to wear school uniforms， and we must go home in time after school.
I don’t like rules， but I have to follow them. Do you also have so many rules in your school？ Please write to tell me.
Yours，
Li Hua