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不同的结构样式《静静的小院》和《“鸽子弄”起飞了》也是两篇写居住环境的习作。徐立群同学在作文题目中突出了“静静”这个定语。第一段先写小院的外观和结构,突出了小院的古老和宁静;第二段续写小院的各户邻居以及“日出而作,日落而息”的生活,仍然不离“静静”二字。从第三段开始,作者笔锋一转,尽情描述了小院的热闹和变化,其中既有简洁的群像扫描,也有对“穿着风波”的重点刻画。到文章结尾,作者又扣紧“静静”二字,动情地写道:“喔,小院,静静的小院正在思索着这变了的一切!”如果说《静静的小院》采取了“静——动——静”的一波三折式的结构,那么,《“鸽子弄”起飞了》则是选择了“昨天——今天——明天”的合乎时间流程的样式。“昨天”部分写了“我”和爸爸从楼梯上滚下来的趣事,“今天”写亲眼见到的工地建设场面,“明天”则是即将成为现实的“外滩不夜城”。不同的结构服从于不同的题材。由此可见,题材变了,文章的结构也应该跟着变化,我们不能划地为牢,用一成不变的结构形式硬套那无限丰富的生活。
The different structural styles of “quiet little courtyard” and “dove get off” are two writing exercises for the living environment. Xu Liqun students highlighted the “quiet” attribute in the essay topic. The first paragraph first wrote about the appearance and structure of the small courtyard, highlighting the oldness and tranquility of the small courtyard; the second paragraph continued to write about the neighbors of the small courtyards and the life of “Sunrise and sunset,” but still remained alive. Static word. Starting from the third paragraph, the author, Feng Feng, gave a full description of the excitement and change of the small courtyard. There were simple scans of the group images and highlights of the “wearing storm”. At the end of the article, the author fastened the word “quietly” and sensibly wrote: “Hey, the small courtyard, the quiet courtyard is thinking about everything that has changed!” If you say “quiet courtyard” Taking the “quiet-move-quiet” wave-and-twist structure, then, “The Dove Takes Off,” is the time-flow style of choosing “Yesterday - Today - Tomorrow”. The “Yesterday” section wrote “I” and Daddy’s funny things that rolled down the stairs. “Today” wrote the site construction scene that he saw with his own eyes. “Tomorrow” is the “The Bund None Night City” that is about to become a reality. Different structures are subject to different themes. From this we can see that the subject matter has changed, and the structure of the article should also change. We must not be jailed and use rigid structures to rigidly cover the infinitely rich life.