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【习作原生态】胖子的烦恼早上,我刚进入教室,就有人冲着我大喊:“嗨,胖子,你好!”唉,不就因为我贪吃了点,身材有点横向发展罢了,弄得人人都喜欢叫我胖子。(虽然点出了烦恼,但“胖”带来的烦恼不够具体,应该增加一些生动的例子,让人觉得必须“减肥”。)我也想过减肥,可是怎么减呢?喝减肥茶,妈妈是绝对不允许的,不说减肥茶有多贵,就单单听人说喝减肥茶的后遗症也足够让我吃惊(改为:心惊)
I was just entering the classroom, some people shouted at me: “Hey, fat, hello!” Oh, not because of my greedy point, a little horizontal development Bale , Makes everyone like to call me fat. (Although the point of annoyance, but “fat ” annoyance is not specific enough, you should add some vivid examples, people think you have to “lose weight.”) I also thought of weight loss, but how to cut it? Slimming tea, mom is absolutely not allowed, do not say how expensive your slimming tea, just listen to people say that the consequences of drinking slimming tea is enough to surprise me (read: heart scared)