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(初稿) 星期天上午,我步行过襄江大桥。刚走上桥头,便有一种心旷神怡之感。天空是蔚兰色的,飘浮着缕缕白云;江水象是同远处隐约的山相联,襄江两岸的高楼、大树都倒映在碧绿的水中,我突然觉得襄樊变大了,变美了。走到桥(身)[上],我发现了一位身着蓝工作服,五十上下的老伯伯。他扶着栏杆,站在那里,出神地望着……我心想:“这个人,比我还出神,我走着看,而他干脆站着看,真有意思!”我(又)[不禁]仔细打量[起]他[来]。写景不能一般化。要仔细观察抓住特点;作文时要写出景物的特点。初点题意。写人物神情,为后文伏笔。改几个字、语言和
(Preliminary) On Sunday morning, I walked over the Minjiang River Bridge. Just walked on the bridge, there is a sense of relaxed and happy. The sky is blue, floating with white clouds; rivers and rivers are connected with distant mountains in the distance. The tall buildings and trees on the banks of the Minjiang River are reflected in the green water. I suddenly feel that the Xiangfan has become bigger and more beautiful. . Going to the bridge [top], I found an old man dressed in blue overalls and fifty. He stood on the railing, stood there, staring intently... I thought to myself, “This man is more than I am. I walk and see, and he just stands and looks at it. It’s interesting!” I (also) [can’t help but ] Look carefully [from] he [to]. Scenery cannot be generalized. Observe the characteristics carefully; write the characteristics of the scenery. At the beginning of the question. Write character’s expression, foreshadows later. Change words, languages and