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通过2016年普通高考评卷英语作文评分标准的评分总则可知，一篇高分英语作文要符合以下三点：应用了较丰富的句式结构、高级词汇和作为串珠红线的连接成分。本文将从以上三个方面帮助同学们打造高分作文，希望对大家有所帮助。
[多样化的句式结构]
要使所写的文章凸显文采，显示综合运用语言的能力，同学们就应运用复杂多样的句式结构，尽量避免使用结构单一、长度相同的单句。
1. 使用定语从句
（2016·天津卷） Two weeks have passed since you came to our school for the exchange program which we all benefited from.
（2015·安徽卷） The person I would like to interview is Yang Liwei.
（2015·陕西卷） Successfully， I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activities of my class， which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates.
2. 使用名词性从句
（2016·四川卷） Of course， there are many other reasons to explain why I’m so excited about the spring.
（2015·四川卷） And you also should keep it in mind that comparing notes with your classmates frequently is a good way to improve your study.
（2015·安徽卷） If I could interview him， I would ask him what made him an astronaut and how he was trained.
3. 使用状语从句
（2016·江苏卷） Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey.
（2015·全国卷Ⅰ） You can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative.
（2015·陕西卷）Besides， I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher.
4. 使用并列句
（2016·江苏卷） On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it.
（2015·江苏卷） It not only affects our everyday life， but may also threaten people’s lives.
（2015·安徽卷） I have long been interested in space exploration and I believe I could learn a great deal from him about it.
（2015·浙江卷） Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place.
5. 使用强调句
（2015·福建卷） It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.
（2015·江苏卷） It is the people who obey the rules that matter.
6. 使用倒装句
（2013·广东卷） Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.
（2013·湖北卷） Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways.
7. 使用非谓语动词短语
（2015·福建卷） In the picture， we can see a boy in worn clothes， sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it.
（2015·湖南卷） Hearing what the head teacher said， I was more than glad and my heart beat wildly.
8. 使用被动句
（2016·北京卷） A week before Earth Day， posters were put up around our school， calling upon us to join in the actions for a greener earth. （2015·湖南卷） The other day， I was praised by my head teacher at the class meeting because I recited all the words of Unit 3.
[彰显个性的高级词汇]
如果想让自己写的文章与众不同，吸引阅卷人的眼球，除了少犯错误，使用复杂结构的句子外，还要在遣词造句上下功夫。有以下原则可以遵循：
1. 晚词优先
阅卷老师偏爱“学得晚”的单词，因为使用学得比较晚的单词，可以体现一个人“学以致用”的意识。在写作时尽量使用七、八级词汇。如：
2. 短语优先
在阅卷老师看来，活用短语是一个考生能力的体现。因此，我们可以掌握一些将某些常见单词转化为短语的用法。如：
3. “具体化”单词优先
请对比以下句子：
①go to school everyday.
②ride to school everyday.
很多同学都能感觉到②要比①好。究其原因，是②中的ride比①中的go更加具体：go只表达了“去”的意思，而ride不但表达出“去”的意思，还能表达出具体的交通方式。
③Wang is a good teacher.
④Mr. Wang is a kind， patient and knowledgeable teacher.
③只表达出Mr. Wang是一个“好”老师，而到底“好”在哪些方面，却没有具体说清楚；④则清楚地告诉读者，Mr. Wang好在三个方面：和蔼（kind）、耐心（patient）以及知识丰富（knowledgeable）。因此，我们要学会换用更为具体的单词来表达。
[作为串珠红线的连接词]
评分标准把上下文连贯专门提出来，可见恰当地使用连接词非常重要。我们应该根据所写文章的内容，按时间顺序、空间顺序、逻辑关系、前因后果等来组织所写内容之间的关系。不一定要按照作文题目中的提示顺序来组篇，可以适当调整，然后加入构成语篇纽带的过渡语串句成文，从而使所写的文章层次清晰，逻辑分明。
熟记以下语句间的连接成分，在写作时，依据所写内容，恰当使用连接词，这样才能使你所写的文章结构紧凑、逻辑清晰。
（2016·全国卷Ⅰ） Moreover， by doing the part-time job I can get some precious experience so that I can better adapt to the development and changes of society.
（2015·北京卷） First， he showed us the basic steps and skills of making dough figurines. We stood around him and watched attentively. Then we started to have a try ourselves. The old man walked around and helped us patiently.
Finally， we put the figurines we made on the table and took pictures with the old craftsman. Looking at the figurines， we were all very excited.
（2015·广东卷） Thus， I urge to make a rule which says Learn from each other， hoping that they will learn more knowledge and make more friends by helping each other.
（2015·江苏卷） Quite a few things give rise to the traffic problem. In spite of the large-scale construction of roads and highways， there is still much room for improvement， because of the ever increasing number of cars these years. What’s worse， some drivers， cyclists and pedestrians do not think it vital to obey traffic rules.
总之，一篇文章如果书写美观、语言准确、内容完整，而且使用了较多的高档句式和词汇，行文流畅，就一定能赢得阅卷老师的青睐，获得理想的分数。
链 接
2016年全国卷Ⅰ高分作文
Dear Ms Jenkins，
I’m writing to ask you for help. I’m applying for a part-time job in an overseas-funded corporation. I think it’ll be a new challenge to me. Besides， I can obtain some precious experience from the part-time job， which also makes me better adapt to the development and changes of society.
I’ve already written the application and resume. But I’m afraid that there are some mistakes about the words and format. Therefore， I have to put you to trouble by correcting my mistakes in the material I attach to the letter. I’d be very grateful if you could do me a favor.
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua
[多样化的句式结构]
要使所写的文章凸显文采，显示综合运用语言的能力，同学们就应运用复杂多样的句式结构，尽量避免使用结构单一、长度相同的单句。
1. 使用定语从句
（2016·天津卷） Two weeks have passed since you came to our school for the exchange program which we all benefited from.
（2015·安徽卷） The person I would like to interview is Yang Liwei.
（2015·陕西卷） Successfully， I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activities of my class， which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates.
2. 使用名词性从句
（2016·四川卷） Of course， there are many other reasons to explain why I’m so excited about the spring.
（2015·四川卷） And you also should keep it in mind that comparing notes with your classmates frequently is a good way to improve your study.
（2015·安徽卷） If I could interview him， I would ask him what made him an astronaut and how he was trained.
3. 使用状语从句
（2016·江苏卷） Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey.
（2015·全国卷Ⅰ） You can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative.
（2015·陕西卷）Besides， I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher.
4. 使用并列句
（2016·江苏卷） On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it.
（2015·江苏卷） It not only affects our everyday life， but may also threaten people’s lives.
（2015·安徽卷） I have long been interested in space exploration and I believe I could learn a great deal from him about it.
（2015·浙江卷） Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place.
5. 使用强调句
（2015·福建卷） It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.
（2015·江苏卷） It is the people who obey the rules that matter.
6. 使用倒装句
（2013·广东卷） Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.
（2013·湖北卷） Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways.
7. 使用非谓语动词短语
（2015·福建卷） In the picture， we can see a boy in worn clothes， sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it.
（2015·湖南卷） Hearing what the head teacher said， I was more than glad and my heart beat wildly.
8. 使用被动句
（2016·北京卷） A week before Earth Day， posters were put up around our school， calling upon us to join in the actions for a greener earth. （2015·湖南卷） The other day， I was praised by my head teacher at the class meeting because I recited all the words of Unit 3.
[彰显个性的高级词汇]
如果想让自己写的文章与众不同，吸引阅卷人的眼球，除了少犯错误，使用复杂结构的句子外，还要在遣词造句上下功夫。有以下原则可以遵循：
1. 晚词优先
阅卷老师偏爱“学得晚”的单词，因为使用学得比较晚的单词，可以体现一个人“学以致用”的意识。在写作时尽量使用七、八级词汇。如：
2. 短语优先
在阅卷老师看来，活用短语是一个考生能力的体现。因此，我们可以掌握一些将某些常见单词转化为短语的用法。如：
3. “具体化”单词优先
请对比以下句子：
①go to school everyday.
②ride to school everyday.
很多同学都能感觉到②要比①好。究其原因，是②中的ride比①中的go更加具体：go只表达了“去”的意思，而ride不但表达出“去”的意思，还能表达出具体的交通方式。
③Wang is a good teacher.
④Mr. Wang is a kind， patient and knowledgeable teacher.
③只表达出Mr. Wang是一个“好”老师，而到底“好”在哪些方面，却没有具体说清楚；④则清楚地告诉读者，Mr. Wang好在三个方面：和蔼（kind）、耐心（patient）以及知识丰富（knowledgeable）。因此，我们要学会换用更为具体的单词来表达。
[作为串珠红线的连接词]
评分标准把上下文连贯专门提出来，可见恰当地使用连接词非常重要。我们应该根据所写文章的内容，按时间顺序、空间顺序、逻辑关系、前因后果等来组织所写内容之间的关系。不一定要按照作文题目中的提示顺序来组篇，可以适当调整，然后加入构成语篇纽带的过渡语串句成文，从而使所写的文章层次清晰，逻辑分明。
熟记以下语句间的连接成分，在写作时，依据所写内容，恰当使用连接词，这样才能使你所写的文章结构紧凑、逻辑清晰。
（2016·全国卷Ⅰ） Moreover， by doing the part-time job I can get some precious experience so that I can better adapt to the development and changes of society.
（2015·北京卷） First， he showed us the basic steps and skills of making dough figurines. We stood around him and watched attentively. Then we started to have a try ourselves. The old man walked around and helped us patiently.
Finally， we put the figurines we made on the table and took pictures with the old craftsman. Looking at the figurines， we were all very excited.
（2015·广东卷） Thus， I urge to make a rule which says Learn from each other， hoping that they will learn more knowledge and make more friends by helping each other.
（2015·江苏卷） Quite a few things give rise to the traffic problem. In spite of the large-scale construction of roads and highways， there is still much room for improvement， because of the ever increasing number of cars these years. What’s worse， some drivers， cyclists and pedestrians do not think it vital to obey traffic rules.
总之，一篇文章如果书写美观、语言准确、内容完整，而且使用了较多的高档句式和词汇，行文流畅，就一定能赢得阅卷老师的青睐，获得理想的分数。
链 接
2016年全国卷Ⅰ高分作文
Dear Ms Jenkins，
I’m writing to ask you for help. I’m applying for a part-time job in an overseas-funded corporation. I think it’ll be a new challenge to me. Besides， I can obtain some precious experience from the part-time job， which also makes me better adapt to the development and changes of society.
I’ve already written the application and resume. But I’m afraid that there are some mistakes about the words and format. Therefore， I have to put you to trouble by correcting my mistakes in the material I attach to the letter. I’d be very grateful if you could do me a favor.
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua