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Do you like pop music？ I like it very much. Which pop star do you like best？ I like Han Hong. She sings very good①. I think she is the best singer in China.
Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well. So I don’t like them. If a singer sings very well， he will have a lot of fans， even though he is not handsome. If a singer sings well and has good looking② at the same time， it will be perfect. He must be well loved by his fans. Such singers are Song Zuying， Emil Wakin Chau， Jay Chou， Andy Lau and so on.
Pop music is popular among young people all over the world. It can even make you to③ forget your unhappiness， worries and anger. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a long life.
山東梁山扬营中学八年级（6）班 王庆彬
点评
1. 优点：
该文章写的是作者对流行音乐的喜爱，并对流行音乐及歌手的实力与相貌发表了自己的看法。全文结构安排合理，语句通顺，层次清晰。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①good改为well。修饰动词用well。
②looking改为looks。looks意为“外貌”。
③去掉to。make sb. do sth.意为“使某人做某事”。
④to改为for。be good for意为“对……有好处”。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。
Many singers are very beautiful， but they do not sing well. So I don’t like them. If a singer sings very well， he will have a lot of fans， even though he is not handsome. If a singer sings well and has good looking② at the same time， it will be perfect. He must be well loved by his fans. Such singers are Song Zuying， Emil Wakin Chau， Jay Chou， Andy Lau and so on.
Pop music is popular among young people all over the world. It can even make you to③ forget your unhappiness， worries and anger. Listening to pop music is good to④ your health. If you often listen to pop music， you can live a long life.
山東梁山扬营中学八年级（6）班 王庆彬
点评
1. 优点：
该文章写的是作者对流行音乐的喜爱，并对流行音乐及歌手的实力与相貌发表了自己的看法。全文结构安排合理，语句通顺，层次清晰。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①good改为well。修饰动词用well。
②looking改为looks。looks意为“外貌”。
③去掉to。make sb. do sth.意为“使某人做某事”。
④to改为for。be good for意为“对……有好处”。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。