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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本 期 点 评 名 师
石宇 男，山东省梁山县杨营中学一级教师，济宁市优秀教师，济宁市教学能手，梁山县优秀班主任；曲阜师范大学英语系毕业，多年担任毕业班的英语教学，取得了优异成绩；辅导的学生在山东省2012年初中生英语竞赛中荣获一等奖；在国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文多篇。
Li Hua is one of my classmates. We are good friends. Li Hua is kind and warm-hearted. When somebody in her class falls ill， she goes to attend to him or her. When someone has trouble at① his study， Li Hua always helps him with his lessons. As I am not able to knit a sweater， she lends to② me a hand. When classes are over， she is always the first to clean the blackboard. When an old man or woman has difficulty in walking upstairs， she goes to support him or her. In a word， whenever someone is in need， she never stands by.
Although she is so fat， she is still quick in action and full with③ energy. You can often see her on our playground， either playing basketball or volleyball. Sometimes， I make fun of her by saying， “You’d better to④ play football as a gatekeeper.” She just laughed it off.
She always says， “Being lovely makes a person pretty.” I think that it is true of Li Hua since she is such a girl.
山东梁山杨营中学七年级 吴娱
1. 优点：
本文是介绍自己同学的文章，小作者通过列举事实强调同学李华对其他同学和老师的热情和友好，体现了她的善良和乐于助人的品质。本文结构严谨，层次分明，过渡自然，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① at改为in。have trouble in doing sth.意为“做……有困难”；
② 去掉to。lend sb. sth.意为“借给……”；
③ with改为of。be full of意为“充满……”；
④ 去掉to。had better后加动词原形。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本 期 点 评 名 师
石宇 男，山东省梁山县杨营中学一级教师，济宁市优秀教师，济宁市教学能手，梁山县优秀班主任；曲阜师范大学英语系毕业，多年担任毕业班的英语教学，取得了优异成绩；辅导的学生在山东省2012年初中生英语竞赛中荣获一等奖；在国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文多篇。
Li Hua is one of my classmates. We are good friends. Li Hua is kind and warm-hearted. When somebody in her class falls ill， she goes to attend to him or her. When someone has trouble at① his study， Li Hua always helps him with his lessons. As I am not able to knit a sweater， she lends to② me a hand. When classes are over， she is always the first to clean the blackboard. When an old man or woman has difficulty in walking upstairs， she goes to support him or her. In a word， whenever someone is in need， she never stands by.
Although she is so fat， she is still quick in action and full with③ energy. You can often see her on our playground， either playing basketball or volleyball. Sometimes， I make fun of her by saying， “You’d better to④ play football as a gatekeeper.” She just laughed it off.
She always says， “Being lovely makes a person pretty.” I think that it is true of Li Hua since she is such a girl.
山东梁山杨营中学七年级 吴娱
1. 优点：
本文是介绍自己同学的文章，小作者通过列举事实强调同学李华对其他同学和老师的热情和友好，体现了她的善良和乐于助人的品质。本文结构严谨，层次分明，过渡自然，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① at改为in。have trouble in doing sth.意为“做……有困难”；
② 去掉to。lend sb. sth.意为“借给……”；
③ with改为of。be full of意为“充满……”；
④ 去掉to。had better后加动词原形。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。