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此文出彩句是现在第一自然段中的“如何才能‘缩小痛苦,放大快乐’”——文章不是罗列“缩小痛苦,放大快乐”材料,而是从中找出可资借鉴的思想：用夫差的材料,蕴含“国家至上,从而能‘缩小痛苦,放大快乐’”的思想；用司马迁的材料,蕴含“有事业心,从而能‘缩小痛苦,放大快乐’”的思想。作者从两个方面回答了“如何才能‘缩小痛苦,放大快乐’”的问题。此文还可锦上添花,将现在倒数第五自然段至倒数第二自然段放到文章的最前面——先交代“缩小痛苦,放大快乐”效果,再写实现“缩小痛苦,放大快乐”的根本思想——层层深入,升华文意。
In this article, the color phrase is “How can we narrow down the pain and enlarge happiness?” in the first paragraph of the text. The article does not list the materials for “reducing the pain and enlarging the happiness”. Instead, it seeks out ideas that can be used for reference: The material contains the idea that “the country is supreme, so that it can ’reduce pain and enlarge happiness’”; using Sima Qian’s material, it contains the idea of “professionalism, which can reduce pain and enlarge happiness”. The author answered the question “How can we ”reduce pain and enlarge happiness“ in two ways?” This article may also be icing on the cake, and put the penultimate fifth paragraph to the penultimate paragraph at the very front of the article first, explaining the effect of “reducing the pain and enlarging happiness”, and then writing the basics of “reducing pain and enlarging happiness”. Thought - depth, sublimation.