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张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师，市英语优秀教师，县骨干教师。从事英语教育教学工作31年。多年来，在《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾参与高中版教辅资料《天天向上》《三维方案》的编写工作，并荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号。多次辅导学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中数次获奖。
Hello， everyone！I’m Huang Gang. I have two good friends. Now let me introduce them to you.
Li Hai came to our school half year① ago. He is similar to me in some ways. Both of we② like playing football. We talk about all things around us after class. Li Hai does well in every subjects③， especially in English. When I meet a problem， he is always ready to help me.
I got to know my good friend He Jiayu four monthes④ ago. He doesn’t talk loudly because he is very quiet. However， he is really sweet and clever. At school， he studies hard. Last week he takes⑤ part in a speech contest. He did very well and he got the first place in the end.
There is a saying about making friends： Many friends make the path.
1. 優点：
本文属于记叙文写作，小作者运用所学词汇和语法记叙了性格迥异的两个好朋友。introduce sb. to...，be similar to， in some ways，talk about，do well in，be ready to do sth.，get to know，take part in等短语的精准使用，是本文的最大亮点，这对一名七年级学生来说是难能可贵的。英语谚语“Many friends make the path.”的恰当使用，做到了首尾呼应，紧扣主题，是本文的又一大亮点。总之，本文是一篇出色的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①half year改为half a year。half a year是固定短语，意为“半年”。
②we改为us。介词后面应使用宾格代词。
③subjects改为subject。every修饰名词单数形式。
④monthes改为months。以-th结尾的名词变复数形式时，词尾加s。
⑤takes改为took。由时间状语last week可知，本句应使用一般过去时态。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。
张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师，市英语优秀教师，县骨干教师。从事英语教育教学工作31年。多年来，在《中学生英语》《学英语》《英语周报》《中学生英语读写》《中学英语园地》《英语辅导》《校园英语》等省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾参与高中版教辅资料《天天向上》《三维方案》的编写工作，并荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号。多次辅导学生在省、市和国家级英语竞赛中数次获奖。
Hello， everyone！I’m Huang Gang. I have two good friends. Now let me introduce them to you.
Li Hai came to our school half year① ago. He is similar to me in some ways. Both of we② like playing football. We talk about all things around us after class. Li Hai does well in every subjects③， especially in English. When I meet a problem， he is always ready to help me.
I got to know my good friend He Jiayu four monthes④ ago. He doesn’t talk loudly because he is very quiet. However， he is really sweet and clever. At school， he studies hard. Last week he takes⑤ part in a speech contest. He did very well and he got the first place in the end.
There is a saying about making friends： Many friends make the path.
1. 優点：
本文属于记叙文写作，小作者运用所学词汇和语法记叙了性格迥异的两个好朋友。introduce sb. to...，be similar to， in some ways，talk about，do well in，be ready to do sth.，get to know，take part in等短语的精准使用，是本文的最大亮点，这对一名七年级学生来说是难能可贵的。英语谚语“Many friends make the path.”的恰当使用，做到了首尾呼应，紧扣主题，是本文的又一大亮点。总之，本文是一篇出色的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①half year改为half a year。half a year是固定短语，意为“半年”。
②we改为us。介词后面应使用宾格代词。
③subjects改为subject。every修饰名词单数形式。
④monthes改为months。以-th结尾的名词变复数形式时，词尾加s。
⑤takes改为took。由时间状语last week可知，本句应使用一般过去时态。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。