文无中心 作也无趣——以苏教版春游《我的建议》为例

• 作 者: 张淑云
• 机 构: 江苏省新沂市新华小学,
• 出 处: 新作文(小学作文创新教学)
• 发表日期: 2013年05期
• 关键词: 苏教版 文无 平淡无味 风景名胜 大瀑布 小白兔 一朵云 小喷泉 概念理解 张淑云

在春光明媚的日子里,春游成了学生外出活动的首选,苏教版四年级下册第一篇习作《我的建议》,旨在通过学生对某地春游后的感受,建议大家利用休息日走出教室、走出家庭、走出学校,到大自然中去寻花赏柳,愉悦身心。本以为这次习作对于学生来说不过是小菜一碟,指导似乎略显多余,于是笔者改变先指导再写作的习惯,让学生参考例文自己完成这篇春游建议。等到作文上交批改后,笔者发现有一半的学生写得平淡无味,中心游离

In the spring days, spring travel became the first choice for students to go out activities, the fourth edition of the fourth edition of the Sujiao version of the first book, “My Proposal”, designed to pass the students after a spring sensation, it is recommended that you take advantage of the rest day Out of the classroom, out of the family, out of school, go to nature to look for flowers Liu, pleasure body and mind. I thought this exercise is only a piece of cake for the students, the guidance seems a bit superfluous, so I change the first guide and then write the habit of allowing students to refer to their own examples to complete this spring travel recommendations. Wait until the composition on the approval, I found that half of the students wrote plain and boring, the center of freedom