描写与五感

• 作 者: 熊猫人
• 出 处: 男生女生(金版)
• 发表日期: 2016年05期
• 关键词: 张灵符 一个问题 外貌描写 堂课 孙琦 法阵 全部精力 外界事物 团团围住 信息反馈

在上堂课里,我们讲了应该用贴近读者生活的场景来代替外貌描写的问题,应该有很多人尝试过了吧?那么,接下来大家需要面对的一个问题就是:你是否觉得你写出来的本应扣人心弦的片段不够紧张刺激呢!我们先来看看下面这个片段吧老二拿出一张灵符,向那团身上笼着黑烟的黑影拍去。那黑影闪身躲开,哈哈大笑道:“就凭你这点儿微末伎俩,也想制住我?”

In class, we talked about the situation should be replaced by the reader close to the appearance of the scene description of the problem, there should be a lot of people tried it? Then, the next question we need to face is: Do you think you write it The exciting section should not be exciting enough! Let’s take a look at the snippet below. The second child took out a magic figure and shot the black shadow of the group with the black smoke. That dark shadow dodge to escape, ha ha laughed: “just by your minute trick, but also want to control me?”