借生活点滴,表敬佩之情

• 作 者: 姜广生
• 出 处: 小雪花(小学快乐作文)
• 发表日期: 2014年Z2期
• 关键词: 敬佩之情 生活点滴 用事实说话 我爱你 令人 第一眼 贤贤易色 第三自然 恨生 出生后

【名师画板】用事实说话令人信服,写最敬佩的人也是如此。本文的小作者先借助生活中的点点滴摘,写出自己对哥哥的敬佩。又巧妙过渡,抓住哥哥积极上进这一点,点明敬佩之情。但行文时只是寥寥几笔,触动人物心灵的点睛之笔,却不能再深入一步,只是停留在肤浅的层面上。因此,在写文章时要细致刻画,用情真意切的语言打动人。【习作原色】我最敬佩的人①

[Famous drawing board] Convincing to tell the truth, the most admired person to write as well. The author of this article first resorted to the use of life in the pick, write your own admiration for his brother. And clever transition, to seize the brother positive progress, point out the admiration. However, when writing is only a few strokes, touching the soul of the person’s crowning touch, but can not go further, but stay in the superficial level. Therefore, when writing an essay, it is necessary to describe it in a meticulous manner and impress people with authentic language. I was the most admired person